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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:27:07 GMT -5
Well, not that my script is anything special...I hope I can trust you, and none of you fellas will run away with it...
Now I do have to point out a few things. There is a opening credit scene set in the 70's or 80's that include a bunch of kids getting killed by the monster. It sets up that theres something in this area of the town, and how old this thing is.
Theres a lot of backstory with Spence that is mainly for the actors, and me. Half it it will be fixed. So if you have any ideas, i'd be glad to hear them.
Other then some spelling errors, and a few word issue (like I said someone's arm was reduced to gore, should read he has a big hole in his shoulder. His arm wasnt reduced to gore.
Also remember this is typed in the script format. So it might be a bit funky.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:27:22 GMT -5
OPENING TITLES.
INT. CAR- ON ROUTE TO WAY HILLS.
Our story begins with Spencer Jacobson. Or Spence for short. Spence is a decent looking kid around 17 or so. He’s not too meeky, but not too athletic looking either. Average.
He is heading towards his new home in Way Hills, a small out of the way town, ( which isn’t that small), Spence used to live in a semi populated city. So this isn’t all that jarring for him. Unlike most kids heading to new towns, Spence isn’t having an emo fit. He’s very excited.
Spence’s dad, Rob used to be a police officer back in the city. A damn good cop too. He enjoyed his job, until that Halloween night 2 years ago. What happened? That’s up to you. But it was bad. Very bad! Not much is known about his mom. She gave birth to him, and simply left the day after.
Spence isn’t an only child, but he rarely talks to his brother, even though he’s in the same car as him. He was the son of his father’s Ex wife. They still talk, but are no longer together. He’s an emo brat. Johnny, or now called “Slen” Make up, black cloths with chains and all that. Only 10 years old. This happened around the time where his first girlfriend, Stepho (Yes, “Stepho”, she was a hardcore goth, dumped him to continue suffering in pain.)
Well, since he was such a non conformist, he became an emo. His dad tried to get him out of it, but the stress of his job, and trying to take car of them got in the way.
ROB Hey, check that out Spence!
He points out the window as Spence gazes in awe. The Town. It actually isn’t as small as they advertised. It’s easily the most beautiful thing Spencer has ever seen.
SPENCE So, dad, where exactly are we living? Please tell me its not an old piece of shit house in the middle of nowhere..
ROB Hey, watch that language around your little brother...
This causes little Slen to look at the conversation taking place.
SLEN Fuck you, conformist pig.
Rob just stares for a minute at the things his son has just said.
ROB To answer your question, no. We are not moving to a POS house in the middle of nowhere. In fact, it’s a very nice place. Fully furnished too!
Oh hey Spence, look, theres the school you’ll be going to. Hill High.
Now, as excited as Spence is, there is one thing he loaths. High School. Not for the obvious reasons. He just hates the work involved. SPENCE(DRYLY) Yippy.
They arrive at the house. It actually looks quite cozy. It has a backyard, basement, the works.
Spence checks out the liquor cabnet stashed in the closet in the basement room. He grins devilishly.
ROB Don’t even think about it boy. (He chuckles)
Spence rolls his eyes.
Spence was a quite the partier back home, dispite his lack of friends. Bad news was, his dad was a cop, and caught him a few times, drunk off his ass.
SPENCE I like it. Very...homey. Uh...so where’s my room.
Spence’s room is a normal looking room. Nothing interesting. He sets his suitcases down, grabs some cloths, showers, and changes. (All shown with a sweet montage.)
SPENCE Alright dad, I’m heading out. Uh...can I borrow the car?
ROB Uh huh...and go where? Get drunk and almost kill yourself again? (he chuckles)
You were running around in your underwear, and screaming about Aliens abducting you…and I had to give you the MIP.
SPENCE Dad...that was 4 months ago! C’mon dad...I need to get a round this place. You didn’t even suspend my license.
ROB That’s because I want you gone.
SPENCE So let me go! (he laughs, while punching his dad in the arm.
ROB You want to go eh? Fine. Here.
Rob throws Spence a key. But it’s not a car key, it looks like a lock key.
Turns out, the key is a lock to a bike. A really crappy, ugly bike.
Spence mumbles.
(A FEW MINUTES LATER)
Spence is seen riding down the street at crazy speeds. He almost hits a few bystanders until he reaches his destination. A small convince store. The door chimes as he comes in. A greasy looking man at the counter eyes Spence. His name, is Bubba.
INT- STORE - DUSK
BUBBA Hey there. New here, arntcha? Y’aint gonna steal nuthin are ya? You little jerks always stealin my shit...
Spence, uneasy of the man’s welcome.
SPENCE No sir. Just here to pick up a coke.
BUBBA Since yer new chere, yer gonna need to know the rules.
SPENCE Rules? Like, not stealing “your shit”?
BUBBA Don’t be a smart ass.
Spence heads up to the counter with his coke.
Bubba presses his face extremely close to Spence’s. Pretty much breaking his personal bubble.
BUBBA There’s only one rule out here. We do not tread on HIS territory.
SPENCE What? Who...’s
BUBBA You read them signs. And you won’t end up like dem cher...
He points to a mess of “MISSING PERSONS” posters all over the wall on his window. Men, Women, and children…some missing since last week, others missing since 1974.
Spence looks back at the counter…BUBBA is GONE!
But he pops back up, scaring Spencer half to death.
BUBBA Sorry. Dropped yer quarter there. Chere.
SPENCE Uh...yeah thanks.
Spence just wants to get the hell out of that store. He speed walks out of there, until Bubba stops him with one last comment.
BUBBA Stay off his property.
Bubba begins to laugh. Spence is now extremely freaked out. He decides to cut the night short, and he rides home.
But not before passing a barbed wire fence that says “NO TRESSPASSING”. Spencer stares at the fence with both curiosity, and fear.
He rides off back home.
THE NEXT DAY.
EXT-SCHOOL- MORNING
Spence walks through the crowds of kids, each of them talking amongst another, fighting with each other, or kissing each other.
He finally makes it past the crowds, only to enter a new crowd inside.
INT-SCHOOL-DAY
He checks his schedule as the bell rings, and proceeds to walk into his first class, Social Studies.
The teacher notices his tardiness. And without looking, he says…
MR.FINCHER Mr. Jacobson. (he points to him) Just because this is your first day in class, doesn’t mean you are excused from the rules.
He gets up.
MR.FINCHER In my class I expect only a few basic things from you. One, never be late. Being late tells me you’re a person who doesn’t want to work.
SPENCE (shocked) Sir…I couldn’t find the class, see the desk lady told me…
MR.FINCHER Which brings me to my second rule. No excuses. Excuses are for people who fail. Now sit down, or I’ll give you detention.
Spencer sits, too confused to be upset. He sits at the only desk available. This is next to a kid by the name of Tanner.
Spence looks around the class room, he spies a girl. He is memorized by her. He checks her out from head to toe. As he glances up he sees she’s already taken.
Her boyfriend fondles her hair, and jokes with her. He obviously says something to upset her as he looks at him with disgust, and turns away.
Tanner looks at Spence.
TANNER RAMONE Hey! I’m Tanner. Tanner Ramone.
Spence hears nothing. Tanner tries again.
Spence snaps out of it. They shake hands.
SPENCE I’m Spencer…er Spence. Jacobson.
TANNER Shiloh Weaver.
SPENCE What?
TANNER The girl you were trancing out about.
SPENCE Oh...but I wasn’t...
TANNER Huh uh. So, where you from, new guy?
SPENCE Florida.
TANNER Talk about the opposite side of the freakin spectrum.
Spence watches Mr. Fincher yell at another student, knocking a paper out of the student’s hand, causing the student to sob.
SPENCE
So uh, what’s this guy’s deal anyway?
TANNER Fincher? Oh. He’s a dick. You’ll get used to it. Hey man, what classes do you have?
SPENCE Uh…I have a PE class next…
TANNER Nice dude! Me too! Uh, you want to be partners? Mine kind of stopped showing up.
SPENCE Yeah, sure. (he shrugs. A friend is a friend)
SECOND PERIOD
PE has begun. The PE teacher walks amongst the students.
MR. CAMERON Alright. After last week’s “incident”…
We cut to a kid with a horrible looking black eye, and a cast.
MR. CAMERON (cont.) We are now changing the rules for this basketball game. No dunks. (kids groan)No tackles. And absolutely no punching anyone in the face. Mr. Winston.
FRANK Hey, teach, I said it was an accident.
Spence remembers this guy. The same kid who was with Shiloh. Does he really want to compete with this kid?
He shrugs it off.
MR. CAMERON Frank…please, shut up. Ok class…go!
He blows the whistle and the game is on. Kids trying to grab the ball, but failing, people who get the ball, and throw it into the hoop, and failing. Spence seems to know how to play, as every time he gets the ball and shoots, he makes it.
Frank takes notice of this. He walks up to Spence, while putting his arm around him.
FRANK Yo kid. You’re a pretty good baller. A lot better than these losers here. A bunch of us guys are heading up to the park later to play. You in?
SPENCE Uh…yeah. Yeah, alright.
FRANK Great. Meet us around 4:30.
Frank walks away, as Tanner comes up to Spence.
TANNER You’re getting popular. Well, I’ll see you at 4 then.
SPENCE Who was that?
TANNER Oh him? That’s Frank Winston, he’s our resident asshole. But he’s alright I guess. Throws a helleva party though.
HARD CUT to
EXT-BASKETBALL COURT-DUSK-
To basketball going into the hoop. The final point has been scored, by Spence. The opposing team grumbles.
Frank is all over Spence in praise.
FRANK Oh man this guy is SO awesome! You are one badass baller dawg. Dude, you gotta come to my party tonight. It’s going to be kickass. We got drinks, women, and drinks.
SPENCE Sounds like my nights back home…
FRANK Oh my god I love this kid!
Spence feels pretty damn good right now. Almost like he’s on top of the world! He calls his father, and lets him know he’s having a get together at Frank’s house.
INT-SPENCE’S HOUSE- DUSK
SPENCE(ON THE PHONE) Hey Dad, look, some of the guys are throwing a get together, and I was invited.
Rob sighs. He was a teenager too, he knew what the words “get together” ment. Sex, drugs, drinking. His first instinct is to say no. But if he holds back his son, then he’ll never grow up.
He simply states.
ROB Home at 12. Be careful. Any problems, you call me.
SPENCE (Excited) You got it pops!
He hangs up the phone, and hops in the almost full car.
This will be a night, they will never forget.
INT-CAR-NIGHT
The kids begin the night with some joints. Passing it around.
The car zooms past the last remaining houses. Spence is getting a little uneasy.
SPENCE So, who’s house are we going to?
Frank, in the drivers seat laughs.
FRANK House? Ha! We’re not going to a house Spence. You got a lot to learn buddy.
SPENCE So...where are we going then?
Frank points outward, towards the “Forbidden Zone”.
Spence’s anxiety builds.
SPENCE Um...isn’t that the place where all those kids went missing? I mean...should we really go there?
Frank(who is stoned at this point) gets a bit pissy.
FRANK Calm down. Chill the hell out kid. We’ve been going there since the beginning of high school. All of us are still here. Those dumb hicks will make up anything. No one’s owned that property for at least 50 years. (CONT) The only reason people are afraid of that place is the simple fact that dumbass hikers go out there, fall in a ditch, and die. Then people find their bodies all torn to shit, claim it to be some serial killer like Jason or Myers. When in fact, there’s nothing out there, except trees, and dirt. We’ve been to every acre of that place. Well...aside from the one we’re going to tonight. There’s this badass cave there. Supposedly.
Spence cuts him off.
SPENCE A cave...? No houses? Nothing?
FRANK Nothing. Oh, we’re almost at the turn. Hang on everyone!
They all scream in perfect sync. It’s a loud, but fun scream, as the car spins through the dark woods.
There are 9 people in the vehicle. Spence, Tanner, Frank, Frank’s buddies, Alex(girl), Val(girl), Tim, Sean, Zack, and finally Shiloh.
FADE IN-
To the kids walking through the woods with flash lights.
TIM Yo, we almost there...I gotta piss.
Tim’s best friend is Brian. They’re the complete opposite…but for some reason, totally work with each other.
BRIAN Then go piss you idiot. It’s the woods. Basically it’s like one big toilet.
So Tim goes to pee. And the rest of the kids walk.
After Tim finishes urinating, he realizes that he is alone. Not a single soul is in the vicinity of the area.
Tim calls out for someone. He tries his phone, and it doesn’t work. He curses to himself.
Behind him, a figure moves into the bright moonlight, and then quickly disappears into the darkness again. Tim $turns around a second after the figure disappears.
He is truly afraid. He begins to walk through the dank woods, slowly at first. Then he smells something putrid.
TIM What the hell is that...ugh. Smells like...vinegar and dead rabbits...
He holds his hands over his mouth, trying to deflect the horrible odor. The odor, despite Tim’s description, smells like someone poured vinegar all over a decomposed animal. So he got one part right.
Tim notices the smell getting stronger. He hears a small chirp, the causes him to have a full blown freak out.
He runs through the woods screaming a crying for help, until he trips over an up rooted tree. He falls down a small ravine, rolling, tumbling.
He stops in front of two, big black boots. This is the end, he thinks.
He looks up, past the laces, past the tip of the boot…and that’s it. They’re just boots. Standing there.
Tim sighs, and curses with great glee.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:28:23 GMT -5
At that moment, a hand grabs him, and pulls him up.
Tim hops into a kung fu stance. He sighs.
It’s Brian.
BRIAN Bro! Where the hell have you been? Took a detour, you stupid retard.
Tim’s in no mood to chill right now. He’s a mess.
BRIAN We found the cave bro. It’s amazing!
The cave…is in fact amazing, for the simple fact that is not a cave. It’s a full on manmade tunnel. It’s a perfect arch. The kids all gather around it.
Frank yells into the cave, checking for any sign of life. He points his light into the cave. It seems to go on forever.
SEAN You going to go in, you pussy?
FRANK Shut the hell up, or i’ll punch you in your fucking face.
Sean shuts up. Not scared at this comment. Just annoyed.
Spence continues to eye Shiloh. Shiloh even glances back a few times, and smiles softly.
SHILOH C’mon Frank, let’s just go to our old spot. This is too creepy for me.
FRANK Honey, listen, nothing’s going to get you. I swear. Except me when I get some alone time...
A few guys laugh at his pathetic joke, Shiloh rolls her eyes.
They begin to head into the cave. Spence is the only reluctant one.
He whispers to Tanner.
SPENCE You know those horror flicks where the stupid teenagers go into the dark and scary cave, and then end up getting chased by a crazy axe murder?
TANNER Yeah?
SPENCE Well...this seems kinda like that. I’m not going in there. I’d like to live tonight.
TANNER Relax-
Then Spence says exactly what Tanner was going to say, in perfect sync.
TANNER AND SPENCE Relax, everything is going to be fine.
SPENCE Yeah...screw this.
He starts to head out, when Frank spots him.
FRANK Where the hell are you going?
Spence thinks for a moment.
SPENCE Uh...I uh..got to use the uh, go to the bathroom.
FRANK Oh...well, don’t go too far.
Spence sighs. Saved. He gets to be out of the horrible spooky cave, and hopefully keeps his reputation.
He waits outside of the cave.
As the rest of the kids head deeper into the cave tunnel, they begin to smell that hideous odor.
They all collectively groan, but keep pressing on.
Val and Alex cling on to Zack and Sean.
VAL Ok, this is getting like, super creepy. Like when could we like leave? ZACK (Mocking Val) When like, we’re like drunk like, and like having like fun.
Val lightly punches Brian on the arm, and laughs.
VAL You’re such an asshole.
Brian’s flashlight passes by something that get’s Alex’s attention. It’s a cave drawing.
Brian shines his light back on it. It’s a picture of a stick figure, standing under a gigantic orb of sorts. Lines spouting from it. There were more drawings, but the seemed to have been broken away. Val looks down, and spies a broken pot of sorts. It has simieler carvings, as the drawing had.
The first carving is the same stick man, under a glowing orb. The second, a figure standing over the man. The figure does not look like the stick man. The second carving, is the figure standing strong, while a stick man bows under it. The third, is that figure beheading the stick man, with a few more stick people behind it.
Strange symbols cover the pot.
The kids are all drawn into looking at this pot.
Once they get the final picture, they freak a tad.
The final picture, is the figure, eating the stick people. A sharp noise jolts Val, and she drops the pot. Breaking it into a thousand pieces.
The noise was just Tim, leaning onto a rock, which broke off.
FRANK Good job Val. That thing could’ve been priceless!
VAL Shut up!
Shiloh looks down at the broken pit. She spies a piece that doesn’t look like a piece of broken clay. It’s round, and small.
She picks up the piece and turns it around.
The piece is a sculpture. It is not of a man. The piece is sculpting with a round head, two big bulbous eyes, two small holes where the nose should be, and a small mouth.
SHILOH What the heck?
FRANK Lemme see that.
He grabs the sculpture in a quick swipe.
SHILOH Hey! I was looking at that!
Frank is now staring deeply at the sculpture. It’s the oddest thing Frank has ever seen.
FRANK (Ignoring Shiloh) Y’know what this looks like? Ever see one of those UFO shows? This is like one of those grey’s or something. They did a whole report on these guy’s....
The kids all feel a tad uneasy now. One thing lingers in the back of their mind, could this be the home of an Alien Grey?
FRANK (CONT.)...they found old sculptures and paintings of these guys. Man...this could get some money of it. Tim breaks out the liquor. Frank grabs a bottle of the hard stuff.
VAL My money you mean. I found it remember...
FRANK You’re a rich bitch Val, you don’t need that money. You’ll probably spend it on more booze, and get in a few dozen more accidents.
This angers Val incredibly. She lashes out at Frank.
Frank laughs like a mad man, while chugging another slug of the hard liquor.
VAL SHUT UP YOU BASTARD! Goddamn it...it was a fucking accident alright? Goddamn it...goddamn you.
She begins to sob. Shiloh is the one that comforts her.
SHILOH Why do you have to be such an asshole. Can’t you spend one day not trying to break people? Does it get you off? You sadistic prick!
Frank heard what she said. The fire is building.
FRANK What did you just say?
SHILOH You heard me.
FRANK Well, apparently I didn’t. It sounded like you called me a....
SHILOH Prick.
Frank tries to say something, but before he has the chance, Shiloh and Val are already gone.
FRANK Goddamn bitches. Eff them. C’mon, let’s find more shit.
EXT-OUTSIDE OF CAVE-NIGHT
Shiloh and Val walk out of the cave, Shiloh is holding onto Val, whilst comforting her.
VAL That son of a bitch...I tried to keep it on the down low, I tried not to let it spread, but that prick just had to do that.
SHILOH I’ve been wanting to dump his ass for a while. Ever since he met Linda at the party, he’s been working his way down her pants.
VAL (Sobbing) W-wha-whata asshole.
SHILOH But, want to know the funny part?
Val nods sheepishly.
SHILOH (Looks around to make sure no one’s listening, and whispers) She’s a lesbian.
For some reason, this makes Val chuckle madly. A much needed remedy to a horrible night. Val looks into the distance. She spots Spence.
VAL Hey, Shi, isn’t that the new kid? He’s kinda cute. You should talk to him. He’s been eyein you all night.
Shiloh blushes.
SHILOH Oh...I don’t know...
VAL Grow some balls. (Laughs)
She shoves Shiloh in the direction of Spence. She wipes her tears, and singles her to go.
Spence sits in the dark, playing with his flashlight, on and off, on and off.
Shiloh sits next to him. This causes Spence to feel quite nervous.
SHILOH Hey! You’re new here huh? Um, where are you from?
Spence stammers.
SPENCE Uh...um...flah..oer...um...
Shiloh touches his hand tenderly.
SHILOH Hey...hey, relax. Don’t worry.
Spence tries to brush it off. And tries to blame it on something other then he’s almost in love with this girl.
SPENCE Oh..uh, sorry. It’s just been a bit hard leaving all my friends behind. In Florida.
Obvious lie. But this makes Shiloh feel a tad sad for Spence. She looks down, and says…
SHILOH I know what that feels like. When my family moved here from Cali...
Spence quietly makes a victory gesture at the fact he’s got this one in the bag.
SHILOH So...
Spence jumps out of his little victory dance and gets back to reality.
SHILOH (CONT)...What do you like to do for fun?
SPENCE Uh. I’m a movie buff of sorts. I mean, that’s kind of why i’m out here. And not in there. Y’know, spooky cave, buncha drunken teens, kinda seems like an opening to a Friday the 13th flick.
SHILOH I like part 6 the best.
She says shyly.
Spence is shocked! A girl knows her movies!
SPENCE Wow...me too! I don’t think I ever met a girl who enjoyed a Friday movie as much as me. Heh.
Shiloh shivers.
SHILOH I’m kinda...chilly. Do you mind if I kind of...
She awkwardly places herself onto Spence. Arm around the shoulder, close. But something feels right about this.
They continue to hold each other so tenderly as clouds cover the full moon above.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:28:48 GMT -5
MEANWHILE.
INT-CAVE-NIGHT
The kids continue to wade through the dark and spooky cave. It feels like it could go on forever.
Frank is the leader of the group, now downing beers, one after another.
He struts like he’s the biggest badass of all time, until he trips like a dumbass, on to his face/
He curses at whatever tripped him, shines the light right on it. It’s a man hole cover of sorts.
They all hover around it, until Frank decides to open it.
With the lid off, he can see it’s a big ladder that goes all the way down somewhere. He shines a flash light down there..nothing. But he can tell SOMETHING is down there, because there is a small green light emmeting from below.
He hands the flashlight to Zack extremely hard, causing Zack to almost drop the flash light. One he gets on the first few ladder steps, retrieves the flashlight from Zack, who in return gives it back the same rough way. Frank gets pissy.
INT-DOOR CHAMBER-NIGHT.
Frank descends to the bottom, from his perspective, he sees nothing but a dark doorway. But it’s not like any door he’s ever seen. It’s big and mechanical. Like something out of an Alien movie.
FRANK Hey, get down here! I found something!
The green light he saw, was the door’s computer blinking on and off. He shines his flashlight on it. Strange symbols are written all over the buttons. Just like the ones on the wall and pot.
Once the kids get down into the door chamber, they look around with the same curiosity and fear that Frank has.
Frank begins to touch a few buttons, when he finally touches the green button, the door jolts to life. Wheels and motors hiss and crack, machines inside hum, low at first, then louder and louder.
Finally the door opens. Smoke pours into the chamber, the kids smell something horrible. The vinegar and dead animal smell.
But, they enter anyway.
INT- SHIP-NIGHT
The room is massive. Brightly lit columns surround the place. They head farther into the ship, now they’re seeing other things. Horrible things.
They see various dead animals laying around, cut open, studied, picked to the bone. As they go further they see something absolutely horrifying.
It’s a person. That’s about all that can be told about it. Its entire insides have been picked clean. A few people puke.
They, for some reason, decide to head further into the strange craft.
The enter the Engine room. The room contains two things. A circular object in the room, almost 8 feet tall, 4 feet wide.
And the other, a small podium, hooked up to wires, which run down the stem, and into the bowels of the ship.
On the top of the device, a round, disc like object, glowing green.
Frank walks up to the disc, and touches it softly.
Zack looks to his left, and spies something. A gleaming metal mask in the distance. He walks toward it.
ZACK Hey guys, check this out!
He shines his light up and down the object. It’s held in a big tube like container, everything is sealed, except the front of the object. Which looks like someone’s suit. There’s a metal mask, a long almost mechanic like suit attached to it. A belt with hoses, and foreign objects.
The rest of the kids walk to Zack, and the strange suit.
They share all share a collective collection of “woah’s” and “wow’s”.
Frank pulls the disc out of the podium, ripping it off the wires it was hooked on.
The lights in the ship dim, and sputter, then die.
Other lights come to life. Ones at the bottom of the podium, and near the figure.
Slowly, the suit’s right arm moves from the container, it’s gloved hand opens slightly. A long blade silently revels itself from the sleeve of the suit.
Zack turns and faces the kids.
ZACK Have you ever seen anything like this? People...we’re going to get famous! I’ll split the money with you guys! Right down the middle!
With that cue, the suit springs to life, as it’s arm shoots up from between Zack’s legs, all the way through to the top of his head. The motion is so quick, none of them have comprehended what just happened.
Zack stands there for a moment. Puzzled. Then, from the top of his head, a small red line forms. Blood trickles down, as his eyes go in the back of his head.
Suddenly, two arms protrude through Zack’s chest, pushing apart his body, and walking through it. This is our villain’s introduction. We shall call him, the Kroul. (Ca-Rowl. )
The kids get it now. They all run in different directions.
Frank still clutching the green disc.
The Kroul pulls out a pair of Bolas, which spark with electricity. The Kroul throws it towards Tim.
They wrap around his head, until they strike, causing his entire head to explode.
The Kroul sees another kid running away, it’s Alex, he holds out his hand, palm out, as a long snake like object shoots from his wrist. The object strikes Alex in the back, electrocuting her. Her eyes and skin bubble under the intense energy.
The remaining kids, Sean, Tanner and Frank, all run like hell to get out of there. With the Kroul right behind them, the kids quickly climb the ladder out of the ship.
They run through the cave, trying not to look back. Sean does. He sees the Kroul running on the ceiling, gaining distance. This causes Sean to run faster. Faster than he’s ever ran before.
They are now out of the cave, the kids run past Spence, Val, and Shiloh screaming like banshees.
FRANK OHGODJESUSGETTHEHELLAWAY!
Spence turns and sees the Kroul emerge from the cave.
SPENCE Holy shit!
Spence, Shiloh, Tanner, and Frank, all run past Sean and Val. The Kroul stops, and looks at the slowest kids. He reaches in his back “pocket”, he pulls out two circular bladed weapons. With the flick of his thumb, the two discs hum to life, spinning.
The Kroul uses his targeting computer in his helmet to track Val and Sean. Once locked, the Kroul throws the discs at impossible speeds.
Val and Sean hear the discs’ hum, they see them gaining behind. They try to evade, going left, or right, but the discs keep following.
They try to run faster, but it’s no use, as the two discs whip through Val and Sean’s heads. They stand there for a minute, as the top half of their heads slide off like a slab of butter on a hot knife.
Shiloh looks back and sees them collapse. She cries out. Spence grabs her, forcing her not to look back at her friends mutilated remains.
Tanner looks behind and see’s the Kroul gaining.
He keeps running, and decides to look once more. It’s gone!
He stops. The rest stop as well. The forest is empty. Not a soul, it appears.
Tanner spins around, looking in every direction.
Then, from behind Tanner, above Tanner, and upside down, The Kroul slowly coils down.
Tanner turns, and faces the Kroul. He can’t move, he can’t even open his mouth to scream. The best he can do is let out a shrill “eep” before the Kroul picks him up(while still upside down.) He lifts him up, and throws him across the forest. He bounces along the grass, and logs.
The kids yell “RUN!” and book it.
The Kroul jumps down. He looks at the direction of the kids, then he looks back towards where Tanner went.
He walks right up to Tanner’s unconscious body. He kneels down and caresses his face. He reaches inside his back “pocket”, and pulls out a white face mask, with hoses attached to it. He swipes his claw and scratches Tanner’s face, blood drips down. The Kroul takes a small sample on his finger tips.
He drops the blood drop into a compartment in the center of the mask. He then takes off HIS mask, we do not see his face, he puts his mask in his back “pocket”. He puts on the white face mask, he hooks the wires into his suit.
He stands up, and forces his legs to contort. Get smaller, his arms as well. He stands up, and presses a small button on the mask. The mask changes, becomes TANNER! His “cloths” become Tanner’s cloths. He heads back to the kids.
TANNERKROUL Hey! Hey! Wait up! Ugh…
The kids all turn to help Tannerkroul.
SHILOH Oh Jesus, oh god, are you OKAY?
Tannerkroul falls slightly on the ground.
SPENCE Come on, we’ll get you to a hospital.
TANNERKROUL Uh..no, I think…ugh, I’ll be OKAY…
Frank pulls out the disc.
Tannerkroul eyes the device. Like a starving child, to a nice hot meal.
Spence and Shiloh hug each other. Oblivious of what is going on.
TANNERKROUL Wow. What is that thing?
FRANK Hell if I know. I jacked it from that ship. Do you know how rich this I’ll make me? I’ll be on the cover on every science magazine. Hell, I’ll be the most famous person in the world! “The kid who found an Alien!”
Tannerkroul rises, and walks towards Frank.
TANNERKROUL Here, let me see that…
Tannerkroul reaches to grab it, but Frank locks it away in his tight grip.
FRANK Ha! And you’ll run away with it. Hell no…
This angers The Kroul.
Frank eyes his new toy. The Kroul slowly walks up to Frank. His blade emerges from his sleeve.
Suddenly, Tannerkroul’s chest explodes outward as a giant piece of bark sticks from it. Tanner standing behind.
The Kroul stands for a moment in shock, than falls to the ground. Tanner’s face flickers, as it becomes the white face mask. The cloths become the Kroul’s.
The kids run to the car. Frank hops in the front, and tires to start the car. It starts, but only for a moment. Then it dies.
FRANK Could this be any more cliché!
He yells. He keeps trying. Spence looks back to see if the Kroul is getting up. He can’t see much, but the object he assumes is the Kroul is still there.
Finally the car comes to life! The lights flicker on, and…
The KROUL IS RIGHT IN FRONT OF THEM. He jumps onto the car, trying to get in, car moving. When Frank suddenly stops which sends the Kroul flying. The Kroul is impaled on the bark. The kids watch for a moment, then the Kroul pops up, yelling at them. Frank jumps, which causes the horn to beep, which makes him jump again, which causes him to hit his head.
They decide it’s time to leave.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:29:24 GMT -5
HARD CUT to-
ROB in the bar.
INT-BAR-NIGHT
Rob finally gets a chance alone. He begins to talk with the bartender.
ROB Kids are out. My oldest is at a party, youngest is at some concert. The Wrist Cutter’s Brigade or something. And I am here. Getting drunk. *Sigh* This…this is my first drink since…
He pauses. There’s a sense of sadness in his eyes. The incident, he remembers.
BARTENDER Since?
ROB Uh…my retirement. Heh.
He tries to take a swig of his shot, but he’s interrupted by his phone.
ROB Hey Johnny…sorry, Slen. Hey, don’t you talk to me that way.
I’m out tonight.
No.
You’ll just have to walk home.
You take the bus, it’s free, and you go to the house.
Stay at who’s house?
WHAT is his name?
Can I speak to his parents?
They’re dead?
No they aren’t. I can hear them in the car.
Hey! Watch that mouth.
Fine. Stay over.
He hangs up, and rolls his eyes.
The bartender eyes him.
He grabs the shot glass and tries again to down the drink.
Another phone call. He grunts.
ROB Hello?
No. This isn’t Pizza Hut.
Yes, no problem.
He tries again. The glass on his lips. Another call.
ROB What!?
NO! I said this wasn’t pizza hut!
He tries once more…but as he’s about to take a drink, Spence, Frank, and Shiloh burst in, covered in blood, dirt, sweat, and tears.
They speak all at once. SPENCE PLEASE! Dad! Someone tried to kill us!
FRANK He killed everyone!
TANNER Tried to take my face!
FRANK A Spaceship!
SHILOH HORRIBLE!
Rob tries to calm the screaming kids.
ROB Woah woah woah! Slow down! Now, one at a time. SPENCE We went out into the “forbidden zone”…
The bartender slams down the glass he’s holding.
BARTENDER You stupid dumbasses! WE warned you.
ROB gets angry at the bartender.
ROB HEY! That’s my kid you’re talking about. No one talks about my kid that way.
BARTENDER You didn’t take anything…did you? If you didn’t take anything, you’ll have nothing to worry about. He doesn’t like it when people steal from him. He always gets it back.
Frank gulps. He touches the inside pocket of his jacket. The Disc is safe. He’s not going to give it up. The money is more important.
SPENCE No sir. Nothing. We just saw a space…
BARTENDER That’s enough! Don’t say another thing. It’s our secret. And we don’t want no trouble. Now go. Get out of here.
ROB Come on. We’ll go. Here.
He hands the bartender 5 bucks. He leaves the shot.
He walks out of frame for a few moments. And then comes back and slams down the shot. He lets out a great “Ahhhh”, and leaves.
ROB What happened. Tell me everything. What were you doing out there.
SPENCE Well…uh…
ROB No, I don’t care about that, I care about what happened. You said people were killed? You sure you aren’t drunk? Or stoned?
Spence shows his hands to his father. Covered in blood.
SPENCE Does this look like the product of being intoxicated?
Rob nods.
FRANK We found this cave. It had all these strange drawings…then we found a hatch. This hatch led to a gigantic room. It was like…nothing I’ve ever seen. We found this…thing…it attacked us. Killed all my friends…
ROB You don’t look too broken up about it.
FRANK They weren’t my friends…
ROB Oh. Right. Spence, you ok?
Spence nods.
He says the same to Shiloh. She nods, and sobs. Spence comforts her.
He looks at Spence for a second…a girl?? He picks up his phone, and calls someone.
ROB (To the kids)I’m going to call a friend at the station. We’ll keep this as discrete as possible.
Hey Bill. It’s Rob. Look, we’ve got a multiple 10-54ds. Be as discrete as possible.
He hangs up the phone, and looks at the four kids.
ROB We’ll go and check it out…
Tanner steps back, in fear. He tears up a little.
TANNER Uhh Uh...I am NOT going back there man. No freaking way. I’m g-going home…see ya at school Spence.
And just like that, he’s gone.
Rob turns back to the kids.
ROB Show us this place…
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Rob, Spence, Frank, and Shiloh all inside Bill’s undercover police car, we know this because of the tin red light flashing on his roof.
They race through the deserted streets of the backwoods area. They have to pass the high school first.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:29:48 GMT -5
INT-CAR-NIGHT 2:30 AM.
Rob, looking at a map with a flashlight, turns back to Spence.
ROB Ok, we’re almost passing the high school, which turn do we take? The left, or…right..
He keeps looking, his eyes trying to read the small little print.
SPENCE Uh…I think it was ri-
SHILOH (Interrupting) Left! It was left!
FRANK No, you dumbshits, it was straight. Straight into the woods.
Just then, Frank’s jacket begins to make this loud humming sound, as a green light emits from it.
SPENCE What the hell is that?
Frank tries to grab the Disc, but Spence already has it in his hand.
SPENCE WHAT THE HELL IS THIS SHIT! What were you thinking!? Did you not hear what that guy said? Now he’s going to come after us!
FRANK Shut up! You atleast have a home! Money, cloths, what do I got? NOTHING. No money, no job, no goddamn house.
SPENCE You selfish idiot. THAT THING WILL BE AFTER US. Don’t you understand? And it will KILL us. Now get rid of that thing before…
They turn the corner, and there he is. The Kroul.
The lights shine brightly on him, he stands back, as he takes out his small discs, he cocks back his arm and body for what looks to be one hell of a throw.
The kids see the Kroul, but it’s too late.
The Kroul throws the discs directly at Bill the driver.
They slice through him like nothing, blood splatters the windshield. The car swerves and spins out of control. It finally stops when it hits a conviently placed pole on the side of the road.
Everyone flies forwards. Rob smashes his face on the windshield, knocking him out cold. The kids all fly forward. But luckly they had the safty of their seatbelts and the chairs to stop them.
The Kroul walks toward the damaged vehicle. Spence wakes Frank up, he motions Frank to get out of the vehicle. Frank is bearly out the door, when Spence shoves him out.
He lets out a yelp.
The Kroul is getting closer.
Shiloh is out next.
Spence tries to wake his dad, but he’s out. Shiloh yells to Spence to move faster. He gives up, and keeps running, hoping the Kroul will pass the car. He does.
They see the High School in the distance.
FRANK The school!
SPENCE It’s locked, asshole!
Frank reaches into his pocket and pulls out a set keys.
FRANK Swiped this from the janitor’s office! Hurry up!
They run faster, up the stairs. They break the glass door open and head into the school.
The Kroul doesn’t need stairs. He jumps up and over the steps, and heads right into the building.
The closest room they see is the Wrestling room. Frank unlocks the door.
The Kroul getting a lot closer.
They unlock the door, just as the Kroul lets off a fatal swipe, which misses each kid, and instead hits the door.
The kids run to the stairway. Which is locked of course. They unlock it, and shut it on the Kroul just in the nick of time. The handle jiggles. They’re safe…right?
Nope. The Kroul kneels down, and pulls out a tool, and begins to melt right there. The kids book it.
They’re almost down the stairs when the Kroul rips open the door. Like before, he doesn’t waste time with stairs. He jumps down, and lands right as the kids try to shut the door. The Kroul knocks the door open, and sends Frank flying, hitting a weight bar.
Spence grabs Frank and they run out of the room.
They run down a long hallway.
SPENCE You could…just give it…the damn…disc…
FRANK Fu…uh..ck...you.
He then runs into Shiloh and Spence, knocking them down. He laughs and waves good bye to them.
Shiloh looks back and sees the Kroul gaining. He holds up Franks keys, and hands them to Shiloh.
SPENCE GO! Run, get into the equipment room!
SHILOH I’m not leaving you!
SPENCE GO!
He shoves her on her way. And stands and faces the Kroul.
The Kroul swipes at Spence, one dodge. Good job.
Not so lucky with the next though. The blade swipes Spence in the chest, causing him to fall. The Kroul keeps moving.
Meanwhile, Frank is running through the school’s long hallways, frantic, but proud of himself.
He sees that the end of the hallway is locked off. Ha! No problem! All he needs is his trusty keys…which are now gone.
A look of shock dawns on his face, he quickly looks around, and sees the Kroul standing behind him.
The Kroul growls at him, and takes out a small round object. He presses a button, and a stream of wet liquid sprays on Frank’s face.
He at first feels disgusted…but then he feels the pain, as his body starts to liquefy. Pieces drip off his face as he screams in agony.
The Kroul reaches inside his coat pocket and pulls out the Disc. He rips the gate open and walks under it. He shuts it back, locking it.
Frank still screaming.
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Shiloh inside the equipment room. She enters the last gate, and hides there. She moves some equipment and hides inside.
The entrance door opens. Loudly. The Kroul stalks its prey.
Shiloh covers her mouth to avoid being noticed.
The Kroul slowly walks past the gates, opening each gate in a violent way. Checking each area for any signs of humans. Everything must be contained. No evidence of the Kroul must be found.
He finally peers into the last gate. It’s locked. This is it. He grabs the same tool he used to open the locked door. And melts it.
He sees Shiloh, and cocks his head.
He opens the gate. His blade emerges from his sleeve. He slowly walks towards Shiloh.
He strokes her face with his blade. Like he appreciates human beauty. Perhaps he loves fear?
His hand raises for the strike…
Spence appears from behind, with a baseball bat.
SPENCE BATTER UP!
He smashes the aluminum bat against the Kroul’s head. Knocking him down.
He cocks back the bat again, and smashes it across the face again.
Spence grabs Shiloh and they get the hell outta there.
They head out into the huge gym, Spence holding onto Shiloh.
JUST THEN, Spence’s arm explodes with gore. The Kroul shot his chain which stuck into his arm. Pulling him back. Shiloh tries to drag Spence back, but it’s useless as he’s dragged to the Kroul.
The Kroul has Spence in his grasp. He sees the Disc.
SPENCE You have your disc! Why kill us!
The Kroul presses a button on his mask. He speaks in a metallic voice. Deep, and cold.
THE KROUL Need to erase evidence. Eradicate those who know.
The Kroul reaches into his “pocket” and retrieves the same device he used to kill Frank with.
The Kroul holds it up to Spence’s face. Hand pressing on the trigger…
WHAM. The Kroul violently flies the other way, and onto the ground. The acidic liquid squirts out, narrowly missing Spence. Spence watches the floor burn and bubble.
The DISC rolls away into nowhere.
It was Shiloh who beat down the Kroul, with the same baseball bat. She drops the bat, and helps Spence on his feat. Shiloh runs over to the keys, which are right next to the Disc. She eyes it. Spencer yells for her, she gets up.
They run fast, faster than they’ve ever ran before.
They rush to the gate, which is locked. They open it…
Frank, or what’s left of him, screams out in agony as he reaches to try and ask his ‘friends’ for help. Frank is goo and bones. His skin is gone, only an eye remains. No vocal cords, so all he makes is this wheezing gasp.
Shiloh screams, but Spence runs past him. He deserved it. The prick.
The Kroul, now pissed to all holy hell, charges after them. He knocks melted Frank across the hall. Landing just in front of Spence and Shiloh. They’re startled, but keep moving.
The Kroul then begins to bound. His bounds reach over 7 feet. So it doesn’t take that long for him to catch up.
Shiloh unlocks the door with the keys, and heads back outside. She trips over herself, and takes Spence with her.
They’re on the road now, lying there. Helpless. It’s over.
The Kroul slowly walks up the kids. He wheezes, as his mask sputters, and coughs.
Lights illuminate the Kroul for a moment, as he is blown back 40 feet.
Its Rob. In a new car. He yells for Spence to get in. He gets out of the car. Holds his gun up, and fires on the Kroul while he’s down.
ROB Spence, drive!
Spence jumps in, Shiloh in the front. Rob enters the back.
Spence is off. Speeding down the road.
A loud thump on the roof of the car.
The Kroul takes its blade, and shoves it into the roof, trying its hardest to get in.
Spence swerves and weves, wildy, to get the alien off the car.
The Kroul stabs the roof of the car, and hangs down at the side, by the windows.
Rob aims his gun, and fires, missing the KROUL.
The Kroul punches Rob in the face. It’s a hard hit. Harder than he’s received. Another one. He’s out again. The gun falls under his seat. SPENCE DAD!
Spence tries to hit the Kroul against the rock wall, but the Kroul just hops up on the roof.
The Kroul whips out an object that looks like a syringe.
He then grabs Shiloh by the throat and ejects her with it.
She screams for a moment, but then it’s just reduced to gurgling sounds.
The Kroul still holding onto her, and looks at Spence.
Spence is frantic. He looks all over the car for the gun. The car swerving violently.
He feels the cold object in his hands, and raises the weapon at the creature’s head. He pushes Shiloh back, and fires the entire chamber.
He then runs the Kroul into a light pole. He rolls around on the dirt.
Spence grabs his sleeve and rips it off. Shiloh fades in and out. He uses it to stop the blood flow.
He begins to scream in agony. Emotional agony. He doesn’t want to lose this girl. He cries in anger.
SPENCE YOU STAY WITH ME GODDAMN IT! DON’T YOU DIE ON ME. DON’T YOU FUCKING DARE.
Her eyes roll back. Spence lets lose. Screaming, crying.
He rushes to the hospital. His entire world is in slow motion.
He rushes to the counter.
To the nurse, she only sees a teenager, covered in blood, and gore, crying, screaming for help. She gets off her phone call, and rushes toward the scene.
Spence screams at the situation, grabbing Shiloh’s body.
Paramedics rush her, and his dad away. She is pushed through the door, he tries to follow, but the nurses push him back. Practically throws him on a gurney. Spence yells out. The doors close on him.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:30:09 GMT -5
FADE IN- INT-HOSPITAL-DAWNish…
Spence sleeps on his bed.
A doctor comes in through the door, and wakes Spence up.
He holds a clipboard, he gets down to eye level with Spence.
DOCTOR Hey, pal…how you holding up.
Spence says nothing. He’s too drained.
DOCTOR Good news. Your arm was an easy fix. And, your dad’s great. But…
The doctor sighs. Not good.
DOCTOR Look, I’ll cut all that BS, and get too it. Your friend Shiloh, she…well, we’ve never seen anything like it. It’s like she’s been poisoned. But we don’t know what it is. We’ve tested for everything. Whatever it is, it’s killing her. And fast. She’s got about 13 hours…at least. You can see her now if you want. But I’m afraid she’s in and out.
Spence holds it in. He gets up, unhooks his IV. He walks through the doors. Those dreaded doors. Slow motion all over again.
He walks into Shiloh’s room. She’s a mess. Tubes everywhere. She’s almost a machine at this point.
He looks over at his dad. Just a bandage on his head. He’s fine. Thankfully.
He walks over to Shiloh, and grabs her hand. He kisses her on her forehead.
SPENCE I promise. I will destroy this bastard. I’ll find a way to save you.
He glances over at his dad, who is still out of it.
He collapses in the chair nearest to him.
The hum. He hears it. Impossible. The creature still has it…unless.
He looks inside Shiloh’s pocket. There it is. The Green Disc. Glowing and humming.
SPENCE (To himself) You have want I need…and I have what you need.
He heads out of the hospital to prepare.
The room is all alone now. Not one person inside except for Shiloh, and Rob.
From the shadows, the Kroul emerges. It walks up to Rob. The Blade slides out. It gently touches his head, and slices it.
Rob jolts up in a panicked state. A cold sweat drips, along with blood.
The nurse is already there. Fixing his head.
NURSE Whoa woah woah. Relax Robert. Your wound opened up again. No worries. You’re perfectly safe.
ROB Yeah…but my son!
NURSE Don’t worry. Johnny’s staying over at a friend’s, and Spence is back at the house. He just called. Everything’s fine. Get some rest.
ROB I’ve had enough rest.
HARDCUT TO- SPENCE PREPARING.
INT-STORE-DAY
Spence grabs supplies at the local WAREHOUSE (the store name)
Various objects such as wood, nails, a hammer, and to top it off, a pitch fork.
The cashier looks at Spence with unease, and confusion.
Spence glares back, fire in his eyes.
The cashier sighs and continues to scan the items.
MONTAGE.
Spence hammers away, building some object, we’re unsure of.
So far, it’s a long board. He saws the ends, drills holes, nails in a wire.
Finally, he saws off the spiked edge of the pitchfork, and hammers then end onto the bottom edge of the board.
He gets on a ladder, hammering a hook onto the ceiling.
He takes the wire and drives it through the hook, and sends it down to his normal level.
He hammers another hook, and slides the wire through it.
We now see the contraption.
The wire hooks up from the Spence leveled hook, up to the hook on the ceiling, and connected to a line on a small board, which holds up the big board.
Spence gives a tug, and the board flings down, stabbing the air below.
The trap is set.
He cuts a whole inside the wall, He uses a picture of his dad to cover the hole. This will come into play later.
INT-HOUSE-DUSK
The night is almost here. Spence sits on the couch, contemplating on the night to come.
He rubs his face in frustration…
The Kroul is right in front of him. Spence backs up in shock, the Kroul stabs Spence...but the blade just goes through him. No impact. It’s a hologram, coming from the disc.
THE KROUL You should’ve just died. It would’ve saved your little human companion the pain and suffering she will soon feel. The device will be mine.
SPENCE And if you don’t save her, you’ll never see your disc again. You obviously cannot track it, otherwise you would’ve been here right now. I’ll break it before you have a chance to find me.
THE KROUL What is it you want?
SPENCE The antidote! You give me the antidote, and I’ll give you the “device”.
Spence picks up a hammer, and holds it up, over the device.
The Kroul grunts in protest. He pulls out a smaller syringe.
THE KROUL Tonight.
The Kroul fades away. It’s on.
He walks out the front door, and turns on the motion lights. He waves his hands in front of them. They turn on.
Spence saunters over to a chair he’s set in the hallway by the front door. He grabbed his dad’s shotgun from the closet. He holds it at his side. Waiting.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 14, 2010 23:30:35 GMT -5
LATER-
Spence is asleep.
The lights flick on.
Spence slowly awakes.
There’s a shadow moving.
He grabs the rifle. He’s ready. The door handle jiggles.
The only sound he hears is the door opening.
Finger on the trigger…
Cocks the gun back.
The door opens.
SPENCE AIMS AND…
ROB WOAH! Son! Jesus! Put that thing down!
Spence runs up and hugs his dad.
ROB It’s alright…don’t worry.
CUT to Rob and Spence sitting in the dining room table. Their faces lit only by the chandelier above them.
Rob sips a bit of his coffee.
ROB You can’t do this alone.
Spence sighs.
SPENCE I have to. She’ll die if I don’t.
ROB She’s not looking well. Do you really think this will work?
SPENCE I don’t know dad…I just…
ROB Look son. Just give me the Disc. I’ll deal with the monster. Okay? Where is it?
SPENCE I’m sorry dad, but I can’t tell you…
Rob becomes furious
ROB DAMNIT Spence! You have no goddamn idea what the hell you’re doing! It’s suicide! Give me…the DISC.
Spence is frightened. He’s never seen his father act this way. Ever. Something’s off.
ROB I am your father Spenser. And YOU WILL OBAY ME.
Rob’s face twitches. It’s not his father. It’s the Kroul!
Spence nods. He slowly backs up.
Rob smiles.
KROUL Good boy. Good boy.
Spence silently grabs the baseball bat sitting behind him.
Under the table, The Kroul’s blade comes out.
Spence cocks back a massive hit, which knocks the Kroul backwards onto the floor. Spence keeps the bat ready.
The Kroul pops back up, the Rob face is cracked. Broken.
Spence hits him again. He smacks the chandelier on the ceiling above the table, the hit to the Kroul causes his face mask breaks.
His horrible face is revealed for a moment. As the light of the broken bulbs flicker on and off. Only showing bits and pieces.
Spence has never been more frightened.
He backs up, and trips over himself.
The Kroul stands there, as the bulbs flicker. Only showing fragments of motion. He grabs his real mask, and puts it on. Blade unsheathed, he lunges at Spencer.
Spence deflects the dodge with his Bat. But the strength is unbearable. He flicks his bat to the opposite direction the Kroul has his sword locked, causing the Kroul to fall forwards, and Spence to roll out of the way.
Spence tries to get another shot on him, but the Kroul catches the bat in mid attack. He hurles Spence across the room, smashing into the wall.
Stunned for only a moment, Spence jolts up.
The Kroul is gone.
Spence throws the bat down, and grabs a machete he left on the table.
He slowly stalks through the house, looking for The Kroul.
Crashes up stairs. He’s searching for the Disc.
He hears a noise downstairs now. Where is he?
Above Spence, the Kroul waits. On the ceiling. He crawls down, and hangs right behind Spence.
When Spence turns around, the Kroul grabs Spence by the neck, upside down, and hurtles him across the hallway.
Spence runs a bit, through his house, he’s heading towards the trap.
The Kroul makes a sound which could be the equilivant of laughter. He slowly walks to Spence.
Spence laughs too. He grabs the wire by the hook and pulls.
Nothing happens.
The Kroul holds out his hand, it’s the hooks. He throws Spence across the hall, into the front door with a hard thud.
KROUL The device. NOW.
SPENCE The antidote.
The Kroul pulls out the antidote. SPENCE Prove that it works. Inject yourself.
The Kroul nods, and he injects himself with the antidote.
Nothing happens. Test confirmed.
Spence moves toward the picture. He removes the frame, and takes out the device.
He looks past the Kroul and sees the shotgun behind the Kroul.
Damn. He looks up at the mirror that the Kroul is in front of. He sees it. The Kroul has the acid spray behind his back!
Spence slowly grabs a hammer behind him on the table.
They both walk slowly to each other. Both with the intent to break their agreement. They get closer, and closer.
Spence watches the Kroul cock his hand behind his back, and move it toward him.
With one fluid motion, Spence raises the hammer, and DESTROYS the Disc.
The Kroul screams hand drops, or throws both the antidote, and the acid spray. Spence dives for the antidote, grabs it, and slides across the floor.
He stands up and watches the Kroul howl over the broke Disc.
Spence runs for the shotgun.
The Kroul shoots his chain spike, which tears through Spence’s thigh, the Kroul begins to drag Spence back. It’s personal now. The Kroul moves with anger and rage.
Spence tries to stop himself, but the Kroul is too strong.
He passes the acid spray. He lunges for it. The moment he does, the Kroul’s chain shoots back into his wrist, Spence is in the hands of the Kroul.
Spence charges at the Kroul, and STABS him in the eye with the acid spray in the eye.
The Kroul screams in total agony as the entire canister is emptied in his body.
Gore erupts from every hole in his face mask. His arms melt and break. Yet he still tries to kill Spence.
Spence lunges forward and grabs the shotgun.
The Kroul’s scream is loud, getting more grabbled.
Spence cocks back the gun, and fires.
The Kroul’s head explodes, sending parts all over the wall.
It’s over.
Spence slumps on the ground. In shock of the events that he’s been through. It lasts for only a moment, until he reaches in his pocket, and picks up the antidote.
He takes a long shower.
He looks at himself in the mirror.
Walking down stairs he sees the dead remains of the Kroul.
He walks out.
INT-HOSPITAL-DAWN
He walks into the hospital, asking to see Shiloh. The nurse allows it.
When he walks in, he sees her again hooked up into tubes.
He injects the antidote in her IV tube. The blue liquid snakes up and into her body.
He brushes her hair, and kisses her on the head.
He looks over at his dad’s bed. He’s sleeping. Alive.
CUT to Spence in the waiting room. It’s agony.
The door opens, with a hint of hope, he looks. It’s just some old person. He sighs and puts his face in his palms.
The door opens again. Spence looks over…it’s Shiloh. Alive.
He gets up and walks up to her. They stare at each other for a moment. Going through the entire night in their minds. Then they hug.
FADE OUT.
FADE IN-
3 MONTHS LATER
EXT-HOUSE-NIGHT/DUSK
Spence now lives in a new, bigger house. He and Shiloh are lying in the grass, looking up at the stars.
Shiloh picks up a magazine, and laughs at it.
SHILOH Is this your serious face? You look so stern and mature.
She mocks him. They both laugh.
The magazine is Science Weekly, a picture of Spence is on the cover with the words “LIFE FOUND”.
They both sigh. Spence looks over at Shiloh.
SPENCE Oh, Tanner wants to see that new Sci Fi movie tonight? I heard it’s really good.
SHILOH No thanks. I’ve had enough alien monsters for one lifetime.
They chuckle, but it’s really not funny. They once again sigh.
SHILOH You know, It’s strange, knowing that life exists out there. Gives you this feeling of…I don’t know, it’s like I don’t feel alone any more.
SPENCE I’m here.
SHILOH I know. I know. Let’s just hope we stay alone. I don’t think we can take on another one of those things. I know I’ve said it a hundred times…but thank you Spencer. You saved me. You fought for me. No one has ever done that. Frank would’ve left me to die.
Spence hugs Shiloh.
SPENCE Hey, I don’t think I could’ve lived without you.
They kiss. It’s full of love and passion.
SHILOH So, tell me again how you killed that nasty Alien…I love that story.
SPENCE Well, it was night. The darkest time, my dad gets home….
He trails off in his story. Shiloh listens with great interest. The camera pans up to the stars. We focus on one twinkling star in distance.
FADE OUT.
THE END.
Or is it? Cut to the morgue.
INT-MORGUE-NIGHT
Doctors come into the room carrying a large black leather back. The throw it on the table, and unzip it.
The doctors back away in disgust. The melted body of the Kroul stinks up the morgue.
The rest of the doctors leave, only the Coroner stays.
The Coroner talks into his tape as he looks closer at the body. He gets down and studies a small tube.
He lightly touches it.
The tube springs to life, stabbing into the Coroner’s neck, pumping fluid into him. His mouth foams, his eyes roll back, he convulses.
The tube retracts and the Coroner falls.
He rises slowly. He cracks his neck. His eyes open. They’re back as night.
The Kroul stares at the camera… and smiles.
THE END.
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 13:51:17 GMT -5
There are too many "unfilmables" like...
Spence’s dad, Rob used to be a police officer back in the city. A damn good cop too. He enjoyed his job, until that Halloween night 2 years ago. What happened? That’s up to you. But it was bad. Very bad! Not much is known about his mom. She gave birth to him, and simply left the day after.
Spence isn’t an only child, but he rarely talks to his brother, even though he’s in the same car as him. He was the son of his father’s Ex wife. They still talk, but are no longer together. He’s an emo brat. Johnny, or now called “Slen” Make up, black cloths with chains and all that. Only 10 years old. This happened around the time where his first girlfriend, Stepho (Yes, “Stepho”, she was a hardcore goth, dumped him to continue suffering in pain.)
Well, since he was such a non conformist, he became an emo. His dad tried to get him out of it, but the stress of his job, and trying to take car of them got in the way.
Nobody will be able to see what you're describing and the movie won't make any sense. You should write everything you plan to shoot exactly as you plan to shoot it. When you leave things open, like you have, you'll run into MAJOR problems when shooting begins.
Also. Make sure your equipment matches the type of story you plan on telling. When shooting on consumer HD documentaries are the easiest. If you plan on making something that resembles a Hollywood flick then prepare to be disappointed.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 14:15:26 GMT -5
...the actors shouldnt know about the characters? I dunno...I think they should have an idea who they are. But maybe thats just me. What else is open? That whole backstory stuff is just for me, and the actors. It's filler to help me understand who these kids are. Which makes it easier to write for me. And i'm using this baby here.... Shoots in HD- 24p, and is very nice to use. All from my high school. I have lighting equipment, boom mics, the works. Final Cut Pro, Motion, and a pretty great effects pack.
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 14:28:43 GMT -5
...the actors shouldnt know about the characters? I dunno...I think they should have an idea who they are. But maybe thats just me. What else is open? That whole backstory stuff is just for me, and the actors. It's filler to help me understand who these kids are. Which makes it easier to write for me. And i'm using this baby here.... Shoots in HD- 24p, and is very nice to use. All from my high school. I have lighting equipment, boom mics, the works. Final Cut Pro, Motion, and a pretty great effects pack. Which camera is that? Make and model? A script should be action only. By action, I mean things happening. The actors should be able to read into the characters themselves, and bring them to life accordingly. The back story stuff should be given verbally to the actors by the director, but it works better for the actors to build their own back stories. Basically, anything that can't be seen shouldn't make it to the screenplay. Maybe you're just a "big picture" guy and don't possess the ability to write screenplays? I'm not knocking you at all when I say that, it really is a tedious task.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 14:38:44 GMT -5
I see......
I'm not really into writing the scripts...so if I make it big, I'll let others do that. lol.
Well, i'll cut all that BS. So what about the rest of it?
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 14:50:31 GMT -5
I see...... I'm not really into writing the scripts...so if I make it big, I'll let others do that. lol. Well, i'll cut all that BS. So what about the rest of it? My biggest worry is that you can't pull this story off. The ripping a man in half, the look of the Kroul, the room with the mechanical doors, etc. These are things that are cool to imagine, but extremely difficult (not impossible) to make believable.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 15:24:24 GMT -5
Right. And that was my worry as well. I've already started the Kroul. This is his face... www.mooncostumes.com/image/4136Mask is being made now. As far as the ship goes, theres a really cool Laser Tag place that would work perfectly. Have to get the OK for that....but yeah. I live in Colorado, so we have lotsa caves and forest sh-t. Ripping in half? Camera tricks. You take a bloody piece of meat, and split down the middle right in front of the camera. Get the same gross effect, without all the tidious practical effects.
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 15:46:51 GMT -5
Also, the ripping in half thing? There's a lot more to ripping someone in half than just meat. If I were you and I were working on a tiny budget, I would have the alien grab the guy, focus in on both of his hands, grabbing each side of the person to be ripped. Add in a sound effect to indicate the force of each grab, then have the alien start pulling, do a blood effect inside the actor's clothes to show he's coming apart, then cut back to the other characters getting sprayed with blood, have them take off running and then throw the BOTTOM HALF of the dead guy at them, because legs, feet, and guts is an easy effect and you'll be able to communicate the ripped in half thing quite well as the monster pursues them and then you can pan back down to the top half of the body (the actual actor) with white rolled up eyes and a bloody face, making sure to put his severed lower half in the background of the shot. This would keep you from having to come up with a complicated effect that you might not be able to pull off and would (I think anyway) be a neat shot without all the trouble of having to create an FX body that will never look as good anyway. Listen to what this man is saying, Celty! It's all about "never taking the audience out of the movie." Cheesy half assed effects tend to do that when, on the other hand, something shot practically with fake blood and good shots will never fail.
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 15:47:29 GMT -5
Woah...you think he "rips" him in half? No, he just cuts him down the middle, crotch up...
And no, I have no CGI, but i'm decent with effects. I can do muzzle flashes, explosions, blood, ect.
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 15:48:02 GMT -5
Is your camera the HF 11?
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 15:53:14 GMT -5
Yes Tyler.
How? Well, I have a bunch of ideas.
One, the easiest, the monster's hand quickly whips up, and using a blue screen, show a very quick blade straight up to the kid's head. He kinda bobbles there for a bit, blood kinda trickles down his head....
And then i'll put something to tear apart in front of the camera, while facing the other kids, showing bits fall off and then the kids react. Simple, cheap, and easy.
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 15, 2010 15:58:23 GMT -5
The HF 11 doesn't record "true" 24p. All Canon camcorders that they say they shoot 24p do so but record it to 60i. Even if you follow the work flow required to acquire true 24p when you re-encode the footage for dvd you will be bringing it back to 60i (or 29.976 fps).
I have the HF S10 and find that I get a truer film look when I shoot 30p. The only reason you should 24p is if you're planning on a film transfer, otherwise just shoot 30p.
I quit using the "cinemode" a long time ago because it doesn't allow you to tweak many of the manual features. the shutter and exposure automatically adjust depending on the light, and these are features you don't want changing in mid shot. Make sure to learn all manual settings.
Your shutter speed should be set for 180 degree exposure. Example - 30fps = 1/60 & 24fps = 1/48. This is the general shutter speed used in big movies. Used mostly for low motion stuff.
If you want an intense staccato effect simply crank the shutter speed up to 1/250 or 1/500. This will take away all motion blur, causing your video to look chaotic like the "infected scenes" of '28 Days Later.'
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Post by CelticPredator on Feb 15, 2010 23:00:32 GMT -5
I cant take anything that is not 24p. It looks like a Michael Man flick. I like a somewhat slow moving look. I really love the 24p. Atleast, thats what I gathered from it. And I dont think I want very much shakey cam stuff. I want to make this as "80's like" as possible. More fixed, steady shots. I dont want to shake the camera to create the effect of being intense...it's gotta just be intense. Here tyler, a few short films i've done....give me your feedback. www.youtube.com/user/CelticPredator
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Feb 16, 2010 9:34:12 GMT -5
I cant take anything that is not 24p. It looks like a Michael Man flick. I like a somewhat slow moving look. I really love the 24p. Atleast, thats what I gathered from it. And I dont think I want very much shakey cam stuff. I want to make this as "80's like" as possible. More fixed, steady shots. I dont want to shake the camera to create the effect of being intense...it's gotta just be intense. Here tyler, a few short films i've done....give me your feedback. www.youtube.com/user/CelticPredatorI never said anything about "shaky cam." It's a really cool look. Here are two videos with my HF S10 shooting at 30p. www.youtube.com/user/magneto1138#p/a/u/1/lp8El2LVsWcwww.youtube.com/user/magneto1138#p/a/u/2/ulLjuyq55wYHere's a video using 24p. www.youtube.com/user/magneto1138#p/u/6/XNG2Vc0G2RkI lowered the resolution on this one to have a dirtier look. Make sure to let them load for a second. Also. The Michael Mann look comes from using the no shutter effect. Which means that if you're shooting 24p use a 1/24 shutter speed. I watched the Elm St. intro. Well put together, but the lighting was bad at times and I can clearly see artifacts from the 24p conversion. It's really apparent when there's motion.
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Post by CelticPredator on Mar 8, 2010 0:47:23 GMT -5
Im gonna bump this just for Tyler.
I thought of a great way to lengthen the story, and give it some more depth.
Theres this Predator book that through out the story ties into the Navajo Twin mythology. I really liked that idea. So i'll add that in there, and start filmin!
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Post by NOTtehFACE on Mar 8, 2010 9:55:55 GMT -5
Good luck, sir.
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